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Kim Metzger
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Dear Native Speakers,
I could really use your advice on the following sentence:
"All over the world municipal residents feel more ownership of their local governments than in terms of their national government"
I feel a little uncomfortable about "in terms of". Do you agree that it is awkward? Do you have anything better in mind?
Thanks in advance,
Peter
I could really use your advice on the following sentence:
"All over the world municipal residents feel more ownership of their local governments than in terms of their national government"
I feel a little uncomfortable about "in terms of". Do you agree that it is awkward? Do you have anything better in mind?
Thanks in advance,
Peter
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faulty parallelism - replace with "of"
All over the world municipal residents feel more ownership of their local governments than of their national government.
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"in terms of" doesn't make any sense here.
Also, I'm not sure what you mean by "ownership". If you mean "influence" or "involvement", I would use something like this:
"Throughout the world, municipal residents feel they have much greater influence over their local government than over the national government".
Also, I'm not sure what you mean by "ownership". If you mean "influence" or "involvement", I would use something like this:
"Throughout the world, municipal residents feel they have much greater influence over their local government than over the national government".
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Tahir
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Daniel Mencher
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Lia Fail (X)
: Except 'have influence over' may be stretching it a bit far?
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Vicky Papaprodromou
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Orla Ryan
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cmwilliams (X)
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Rajan Chopra
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Alfa Trans (X)
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Craft.Content
: Perhaps the 'municipal' could be dropped, too.
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mrrobkoc
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karina koguta
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Comment: "Dear Julia,
To have ownership of your government means that you feel you have a say or impact on your government affairs.
Thanks for your help anyway"
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"All over the world municipal residents feel more ownership of their local governments than they do their national government."
Here, you are in both cases (local govt's and national govt's) referring to the residents' relative feelings of ownership, so you can simply substitute the verb 'to do' the second time, with 'feel ownership of' being implied. You are right, 'in terms of' doesn't seem correct here.
Good luck.
-Dan
Here, you are in both cases (local govt's and national govt's) referring to the residents' relative feelings of ownership, so you can simply substitute the verb 'to do' the second time, with 'feel ownership of' being implied. You are right, 'in terms of' doesn't seem correct here.
Good luck.
-Dan
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All over the world municipal residents feel more ownership of their local governments than they do w
All over the world municipal residents feel more ownership of their local governments than they do with respect to their national government"
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