Feb 9, 2006 15:50
19 yrs ago
English term
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Native in: Russian 
Works in: English to Russian, Russian, Russian to English, and 2 more.
ran up to her hat
English
Art/Literary
Poetry & Literature
Valina stood frozen in fright. The spider took advantage of her motionless state and quickly ran up to her hat, from where it hopped over onto the window-ledge again.
(In the beginning the spider sits on Valina's shoulder, having fallen there from the window-ledge).
Dear native English speakers!
Please advise on the phrase. It seems to me that it doesn't sound well enough, but I'm not really sure, since I'm no NES.
I'll appreciate any suggestions.
This is my translation from Russian.
(In the beginning the spider sits on Valina's shoulder, having fallen there from the window-ledge).
Dear native English speakers!
Please advise on the phrase. It seems to me that it doesn't sound well enough, but I'm not really sure, since I'm no NES.
I'll appreciate any suggestions.
This is my translation from Russian.
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| 4 +9 | scuttled up to her hat |
Jack Doughty
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| 3 +4 | scuttled up onto her hat |
Peter Shortall
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| 4 +2 | scurried up onto her hat |
sergey (X)
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Jack Doughty
United Kingdom
United Kingdom
Native in English
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English
Specializes in field
United Kingdom
Translator since 1953
Native in: English
Works in: Russian to English, German to English, English
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scuttled up to her hat
Otherwise I think it's OK.
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Peter Shortall
: Well! What can I say...
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Thank you. Ñêàçàòü íå÷åãî
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Natalie Wilcock (X)
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Thank you.
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Bianca Jacobsohn
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Dave Calderhead
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Thank you.
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Refugio
: It might depend on whether her fear is being portrayed as justified or as overreacting. In the US, at least, scuttle has a slightly uglier connotation than scurry.
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Really? I don't think that's so in the UK.
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Will Matter
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Thank you.
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conejo
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Thank you.
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Jonathan MacKerron
: crept up??
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Thank you. The original said "quickly ran", so I don't think that would fit.
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Alfa Trans (X)
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Thank you.
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Rajan Chopra
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Thank you.
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4 KudoZ points awarded for this answer.
Comment: "Thank you for your help Jack! Thanks everybody!!!"
+4
3 mins
Peter Shortall
United Kingdom
United Kingdom
Native in English
&
English
United Kingdom
Legal / Business / Government
Native in: English
Works in: Romanian to English, Russian to English, French to English
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scuttled up onto her hat
I think "ran" is okay, but "scuttled" is the kind of thing you often hear used with unpleasant creatures like spiders!
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Jack Doughty
: What can I say except what you said?
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quite!
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Trudy Peters
: I like the "onto" part
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thanks! Because I think it is "on" the hat when it gets there, before it hops off again.
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Will Matter
: What can I do except agree with both of you distinguished English chaps?
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thankyou!
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Seema Ugrankar
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thanks!
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