Mar 5, 2005 13:40
19 yrs ago
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at her feet / accentuated?
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The sculpture of Athena could be the only one placed in the spacious Sacred Cella of the Parthenon. Twelve-metre goddess wonderfully reflected in a pool built at her feet as enchanted water accentuated the immense beauty of the patron of the arts, industry and skill.
1.still have doubts about the sentence: at her feet or at its feet (as it is a statue).
2. accentuated is a right word used here?
Thank you in advance for your help
1.still have doubts about the sentence: at her feet or at its feet (as it is a statue).
2. accentuated is a right word used here?
Thank you in advance for your help
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+7
6 mins
Richard Benham
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at her feet / accentuated (!)
"At her feet" is much better; "at its feet" sounds distinctly odd.
"Accentuated" works fine. "Increased" is not possible. Putting other figures around her does not increase or diminish her beauty; it can only make it more or less apparent.
"Accentuated" works fine. "Increased" is not possible. Putting other figures around her does not increase or diminish her beauty; it can only make it more or less apparent.
Peer comment(s):
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NancyLynn
: + add a definite article (THE) at the beginning of the sentence.
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Thanks. Maybe even a verb ("is")...depending whether you want a whole sentence or a sort of breathless exclamation.
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SirReaL
18 mins
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Kirill Semenov
26 mins
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Philippe C. (X)
1 hr
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Balaban Cerit
2 hrs
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Charlie Bavington
8 hrs
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Refugio
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Comment: "Thank you."
2 mins
her feet (Athena)/increased
:)
Peer comment(s):
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SirReaL
: agree with her feet (sounds funky, eh?) but increased eliminates a lot of the flavor, hence it's no improvement
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Richard Benham
: Like SirReal, I like "at her feet", but not "increased". See my answer for the reason.
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+2
6 mins
Charlie Bavington
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yes fine but....
no probs with "her" or "accentuated" (great choice of word, IMHO).
However, and I do hate doing this because it's not part of the question, I *do* have a problem with use of "enchanted" to describe the water in an otherwise fairly factual, down to earth text.
However, and I do hate doing this because it's not part of the question, I *do* have a problem with use of "enchanted" to describe the water in an otherwise fairly factual, down to earth text.
Peer comment(s):
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Richard Benham
: Maybe you're right...unless "enchanted water" is some kind of pre-Christian equivalent of "holy water".
2 mins
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Kirill Semenov
: enchanted is ok. methinks
13 mins
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+3
15 mins
Elizabeth Rudin
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at her feet / highlighted
"Accentuated" is a good word. "Highlighted" may be more emphatic.
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Kirill Semenov
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Thank you, Kirill.
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SirReaL
: underscored as an option? or is it too technical?
10 mins
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Thank you, SirReal. 'Underscored' wouldn't work in this context.
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Richard Benham
: I slightly prefer "accentuated". "Underscored" is not so much technical as just inappropriate. You think of meanings, arguments, being "underscored". The metaphor is of drawing a line under an important passage in a book,,,more for words than images.
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Thank you, Richard.
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Rutie Eckdish
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accentuated
- and eliminate "enchanted" all together.
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