Dec 3, 2003 14:25
20 yrs ago
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Spanish term
20yrs experience. Style & fluidity.
Native in: English 
Works in: Spanish to English, German to English
Does this make sense?
Spanish to English
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Tourism and heritage
Maybe it's just me, but I can't see how the last clause fits into this sentence:
La “sostenibilidad” como objetivo de una política de oferta turística, tendente a la irrenunciable rentabilización económica, ha de poder conjugarse de manera equilibrada y mutuamente beneficiosa con los valores y necesidades del ámbito ciudadano, del que el patrimonio forma parte, en el que adquiere su pleno sentido y donde se integra con un sentido de “convivencia”, de los ciudadanos con su entorno y del turismo como diálogo cultural.
Any ideas?
La “sostenibilidad” como objetivo de una política de oferta turística, tendente a la irrenunciable rentabilización económica, ha de poder conjugarse de manera equilibrada y mutuamente beneficiosa con los valores y necesidades del ámbito ciudadano, del que el patrimonio forma parte, en el que adquiere su pleno sentido y donde se integra con un sentido de “convivencia”, de los ciudadanos con su entorno y del turismo como diálogo cultural.
Any ideas?
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10 mins
Ivannia Garcia
Native in Spanish
26 years in the Translation Business
Native in: Spanish 
Works in: English to Spanish, Spanish to English
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I believe there's a comma that shouldn't be there
after "convivencia". In the phrase:
...del ámbito ciudadano, del que el patrimonio forma parte, en el que adquiere su pleno sentido y donde se integra con un sentido de “convivencia”, de los ciudadanos con su entorno y del turismo como diálogo cultural.
everything talks about the ámbito ciudadano (del que el patrimonio etc, en el que se adquiere etc, y donde se integra etc.). I think what is most reasonable is that the following phrase be not separated by the comma, but as follows:
y donde se integra con un sentido de "convivencia" de los ciudadanos con su entorno etc.
HOPE THIS HELPS OUT! GOOD LUCK!
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Note added at 2003-12-03 16:18:37 (GMT)
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Sustainability, as the goal of a policy focused on tourism, which tends toward an unrenounceable profitableness, should be able to be combined in a balanced and mutually beneficial way with the values and needs of the citizenry, of which national resources are a part, in which it achieves total meaning and into which it is integrated along with a sense of \"coexistence\" of the citizens toward their environment and with tourism as cultural dialogue.
THIS IS WHAT I MEANT WAS TO BE INTERPRETED LEAVING THE COMMA OUT. GOOD LUCK!
...del ámbito ciudadano, del que el patrimonio forma parte, en el que adquiere su pleno sentido y donde se integra con un sentido de “convivencia”, de los ciudadanos con su entorno y del turismo como diálogo cultural.
everything talks about the ámbito ciudadano (del que el patrimonio etc, en el que se adquiere etc, y donde se integra etc.). I think what is most reasonable is that the following phrase be not separated by the comma, but as follows:
y donde se integra con un sentido de "convivencia" de los ciudadanos con su entorno etc.
HOPE THIS HELPS OUT! GOOD LUCK!
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Note added at 2003-12-03 16:18:37 (GMT)
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Sustainability, as the goal of a policy focused on tourism, which tends toward an unrenounceable profitableness, should be able to be combined in a balanced and mutually beneficial way with the values and needs of the citizenry, of which national resources are a part, in which it achieves total meaning and into which it is integrated along with a sense of \"coexistence\" of the citizens toward their environment and with tourism as cultural dialogue.
THIS IS WHAT I MEANT WAS TO BE INTERPRETED LEAVING THE COMMA OUT. GOOD LUCK!
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Comment: "Many thanks to all!"
7 mins
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La “sostenibilidad” como objetivo de una política
1) de oferta turística, tendente a la irrenunciable rentabilización económica, ha de poder conjugarse de manera equilibrada y mutuamente beneficiosa con los valores y necesidades del ámbito ciudadano. ,
2) del que el patrimonio forma parte, en el que adquiere su pleno sentido y donde se integra con un sentido de “convivencia”, de los ciudadanos con su entorno y del turismo como diálogo cultural.
1) Sustainability as the target of a policy of tourist offerings or deals etc.
2) Sustainability as the target of a policy which includes heritage...
Do you see how DEL QUE goes with the sentence now?
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Note added at 2003-12-03 14:36:01 (GMT)
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TIP: try to break down the Spanish sentences in their constituent parts...in fact these parallel constructions are sometimes hard to break down but that usually gets one on the right track...:)
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Note added at 2003-12-03 14:39:10 (GMT)
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More structure:
1) Sustainability etc must be combined with ...values and necessities of the local inhabitants.
2) second sentence: Sustainability must also be combined with etc.
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Note added at 2003-12-03 14:44:34 (GMT)
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Lastly, I think that oferta touristica should be
tourist offerings...it\'s being used in business now...for services...instead of say product...
tourist offerings..
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Note added at 2003-12-03 15:29:20 (GMT)
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Ivannia is right...I misread the comma....
1) de oferta turística, tendente a la irrenunciable rentabilización económica, ha de poder conjugarse de manera equilibrada y mutuamente beneficiosa con los valores y necesidades del ámbito ciudadano. ,
2) del que el patrimonio forma parte, en el que adquiere su pleno sentido y donde se integra con un sentido de “convivencia”, de los ciudadanos con su entorno y del turismo como diálogo cultural.
1) Sustainability as the target of a policy of tourist offerings or deals etc.
2) Sustainability as the target of a policy which includes heritage...
Do you see how DEL QUE goes with the sentence now?
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Note added at 2003-12-03 14:36:01 (GMT)
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TIP: try to break down the Spanish sentences in their constituent parts...in fact these parallel constructions are sometimes hard to break down but that usually gets one on the right track...:)
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Note added at 2003-12-03 14:39:10 (GMT)
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More structure:
1) Sustainability etc must be combined with ...values and necessities of the local inhabitants.
2) second sentence: Sustainability must also be combined with etc.
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Note added at 2003-12-03 14:44:34 (GMT)
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Lastly, I think that oferta touristica should be
tourist offerings...it\'s being used in business now...for services...instead of say product...
tourist offerings..
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Note added at 2003-12-03 15:29:20 (GMT)
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Ivannia is right...I misread the comma....
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isaac bekerman
United States
United States
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English
United States
Engineer, builder
Native in: English , Spanish
Works in: English to Spanish, Spanish to English, French to English, and 4 more.
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sostenibilidad NO!!! usa Sustentacion adicionalmete la coma despues de
convivencia no debe estar
espero que te ayude
espero que te ayude
Peer comment(s):
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Mariana Solanet
: creo que quizo decir sustentabilidad, de todos modos la redacción es espantosa!!!!
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agtranslat
: IMO, sostenibilidad is perfectly all right in this context. To be sure, sustentabilidad is equally found on the web. Anyway, according to the DRAE the antonym of insostenible is sustentable, so the jury seems to be out on this.
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Ari Nuncio
United States
United States
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United States
Save the World from bad translations!
Native in: English
Works in: Spanish to English, English to Spanish
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No, it doesn't make sense
The problem with Third Sector writing, especially in Spanish, is that it is plagued with jargon and officious gobbledygook. If language experts (i.e., you, me and the other people who have tried to answer your question) can't make heads or tails of this sentence, who can?
The reason I now routinely reject jobs from NGOs is that they seem to be intent on obscuring meaning, and the rate I have to charge for untangling such text is prohibitive. Having said that, I understand that you're in the middle of this mess and are probably exhausted after slogging through phrase after phrase of nonsense. Here's my understanding of the real meaning behind the sentence in question:
"The notion of ‘sustainability’ in tourism tends to emphasize profitability, whereas the emphasis should be on the values and needs of the people who live in the area that is being promoted. Sustainable tourism is viable only if it includes a mutually beneficial exchange with potential caretakers (that is, with the citizens who must make a living from local resources)."
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Note added at 2003-12-03 15:27:01 (GMT)
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By the way, \"heritage\" is out of place here, at least as far I\'m concerned. \"Patrimonio\" has many shades of meanings. Translating it with a single word in English is usually futile.
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Note added at 2003-12-03 15:31:01 (GMT)
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I would correct the second sentence in my example to say: \"Tourism is only sustainable if it includes...\"
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Note added at 2003-12-03 15:53:24 (GMT)
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Jane: My \'lecture\' is an attempt to answer the question, \"Does this make sense?\" In the full-length version of this speech, which I\'ll spare you, I explore what translators should do when the texts we receive are poorly written.
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Note added at 2003-12-03 16:48:53 (GMT)
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Now that we\'re on a roll, I urge you to consult the IPG Handbook on Environmental Funds (unfortunately, I can\'t provide an address, but it can\'t be that hard to find on the Web). The following excerpt from the handbook may help clarify what your writer is trying to say:
• Economic models must take into account environmental costs and the value of ecosystem services.
• The capacity of all groups, public and private, involved with the use, study, regulation, enforcement, and conservation of biodiversity should be permanently strengthened and promoted.
• Public awareness and environmental education should be promoted at all levels and sectors of society.
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Note added at 2003-12-03 17:05:04 (GMT)
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I found the address: http://biodiversityeconomics.org/pdf/topics-222-00.pdf
The reason I now routinely reject jobs from NGOs is that they seem to be intent on obscuring meaning, and the rate I have to charge for untangling such text is prohibitive. Having said that, I understand that you're in the middle of this mess and are probably exhausted after slogging through phrase after phrase of nonsense. Here's my understanding of the real meaning behind the sentence in question:
"The notion of ‘sustainability’ in tourism tends to emphasize profitability, whereas the emphasis should be on the values and needs of the people who live in the area that is being promoted. Sustainable tourism is viable only if it includes a mutually beneficial exchange with potential caretakers (that is, with the citizens who must make a living from local resources)."
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Note added at 2003-12-03 15:27:01 (GMT)
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By the way, \"heritage\" is out of place here, at least as far I\'m concerned. \"Patrimonio\" has many shades of meanings. Translating it with a single word in English is usually futile.
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Note added at 2003-12-03 15:31:01 (GMT)
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I would correct the second sentence in my example to say: \"Tourism is only sustainable if it includes...\"
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Note added at 2003-12-03 15:53:24 (GMT)
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Jane: My \'lecture\' is an attempt to answer the question, \"Does this make sense?\" In the full-length version of this speech, which I\'ll spare you, I explore what translators should do when the texts we receive are poorly written.
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Note added at 2003-12-03 16:48:53 (GMT)
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Now that we\'re on a roll, I urge you to consult the IPG Handbook on Environmental Funds (unfortunately, I can\'t provide an address, but it can\'t be that hard to find on the Web). The following excerpt from the handbook may help clarify what your writer is trying to say:
• Economic models must take into account environmental costs and the value of ecosystem services.
• The capacity of all groups, public and private, involved with the use, study, regulation, enforcement, and conservation of biodiversity should be permanently strengthened and promoted.
• Public awareness and environmental education should be promoted at all levels and sectors of society.
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Note added at 2003-12-03 17:05:04 (GMT)
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I found the address: http://biodiversityeconomics.org/pdf/topics-222-00.pdf
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Jane Lamb-Ruiz (X)
: NGOs are with the UN; this could be a regular non-profit...NGOs are ONLY UN and I find your lecture out of place here
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Wrong. See "What is a Non-Governmental Organization?" by Professor Peter Willetts, City University, London at http://www.staff.city.ac.uk/p.willetts/CS-NTWKS/NGO-ART.HTM. - NGO may have started as a UN term, but is no longer exclusive...
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cebice
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Thanks, cebice. Jargon busters, unite!
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PB Trans
: You are 100% correct. NGO's are not only with the UN. I know, I was employed at 2 NGOs...
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Thanks, Pina. Seems I got someone's dander up.
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no coma after CIUDADANO, no coma after CONVIVENCIA...
It's really a long hard sentence, but linked by means of preposition, coma are not necessary.
Only my point of view...
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Note added at 2 hrs 29 mins (2003-12-03 16:55:30 GMT)
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And \" sostenibilidad\" YES , spanish business loves those kind of words...
Only my point of view...
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Note added at 2 hrs 29 mins (2003-12-03 16:55:30 GMT)
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And \" sostenibilidad\" YES , spanish business loves those kind of words...
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agtranslat
: About the commas, in Spanish, they are also inserted to allow the reader to catch his breath. Also for solemnity, or pomposity, if you like, as they serve as cues for pauses.
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Yes, of cours, the commas are here for this purposes but everything in its due time. I thinks there are not well located there. Only my opinion...
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